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23. februar 2014

Poem #5 - "Joy"

QUESTION OF THE DAY:

Do you write poetry yourself? If yes, who are you inspired by?


This was written just the other day, and it's dedicated to a certain person in my life, you know who you are. Enjoy everybody and as always, i would love some response!

"Joy"
 

I watch you get undressed as you sit next to me.
Your soft loving mind crawls under my skin
and stays there

The bass is pounding away as we explore
the world in our eyes.
Your smile lights up the darkness i hide beneath

My body feels numb yet alive at the same time.
We are young minds absorbing the fluids of 
life

You are like a never-ending waterfall in my heart
keeping me alive and sane.
My muse in this hour of thoughtless writing

Night.
We fall down, happy and euphoric about
what might bring us the next day
the day kills the night and away we
ride to the end of eternity

Perfect is an understatement for you.

Our love will keep on burning until the sun dies.

22 kommentarer:

  1. oo la...sounds like you got bitten by the love bug. ha.
    young minds absorbing the fluid of life...nice

    as to your question, life inspires me.
    nice to meet you over at PoetsU

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    1. Well yea, got kind of inspired by recent events that happened in my love life ;). Great to hear that you like it! :) And yea, found that site today, it is definitely a great way to share your poetry blog and a way to meet fellow poetry-bloggers!

      Slet
  2. M.Z,

    Love this poem which absolutely shares your love and desires. A most wonderful beginning:)
    Eileen

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    1. Thanks, glad you enjoyed reading it :) I've written my share of poems, and I've found out that poems like these that come straight from the heart, non-edited turn out to be the best!

      Slet
  3. "Perfect is an understatement of you." Wow, this is quite a feeling to express about anyone loved. I enjoyed this.

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    1. Words just couldn't describe what i felt, and perfect was a word that is misused by many people :) But i'm glad you liked the poem!

      Slet
  4. You have captured the joyousness and hopefulness of young love so well. Wonderful to read! Nice to find you in the poetic Pantry!

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    1. Thanks a lot, and nice to find you as well! The site really helps us poets to discover new sources of inspiring works!

      Slet
  5. A very well inspired write, this is and it shows in your words. Nice to meet you here & somewhere. Keep on writing, you'll ne'er know what small or great things you can discover through poetry. Smiles.

    I write because I want to seek understanding about everything that comes & passes by before my very being. Nature & the little creature is what inspires my poetry most of the time though occassionally i offer some time to write about silent wars, death & a bit of old world romances. Smiles. Thanks for visiting me & for your comment, appreciate it.

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    1. Thanks! I'll keep on writing until my mind can no longer think for it self! And your inspiration sounds like its a great one to have, there are endless amounts of inspiration to get from nature and death etc :) Thanks a lot for your feedback, us poets need to back each other up and show support for one another :)

      Slet
  6. "You are like a never-ending waterfall in my heart" - beautiful and poetic connection. Nicely done. Enjoyed.

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    1. Thanks! Love the positive feedback you guys have!

      Slet
  7. Aww so romantic and always such joy to love and be loved no?

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    1. To be loved and to love someone is one of the most inspiring feelings one can have!

      Slet
  8. 'Perfect is an understatement for you.'...... I love this gushing eulogy... :)

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    1. Thanks! I also spent some time figuring out how to end this, I'm quite happy how it turned out in the end :)

      Slet
  9. a joy to read.
    you're definitely in love! :)

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    1. Im very happy that you liked it!:) Its just my way to show the world how i feel :)

      Slet
  10. This is a lovely and romantic piece! "Your soft loving mind crawls under my skin" - great line. It is wonderful when this happens.

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    1. It is indeed wonderful when that happens!

      Slet
  11. lovely, very beautiful, nice metaphors, especially liked "We are young minds absorbing the fluids of life"

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    1. Thanks! I'm very glad that you liked my piece of poetry!

      Slet